Neti Pot.

I thought it was funny. Although I think the writer got I Dream of Jeannie and Bewitched confused. It deals with obsession which is a fairly common theme in Laymon's work. I liked the juxtapositiion of violence and humour and I thought some of the real-life observations were relatable which is also Laymon-like.

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I liked being in the little guys mind. I'm terrible with remembering Laymon titles, but it reminded me of one of his releases last year or the year before. While reading it, I kept going back to that book and the scenes of all the heads on top of the posts outside the cabin the survivors found themselves in. The imagery was pretty good too, some solid writing I thought with very few missteps.

Tt

It was a good story, the kind I like to read actually. And even though you explained the Laymon connection, I still have a hard time connecting this story to him. It seemed more Tim Waggoner like to me though.

Anybody else notice that nobody has commented on the stories except those of us who contributed?

Are we only doing this for our own amusement then? If we continue, should we take it somewhere else? Should we continue?

I'm sure Laurel will respond when she gets a chance. Hellolost as well. Maybe Nanci. The first short story thread was the best with a few published authors responding but they're probably too busy. I definitely want to continue. Even if it's only each other responding that's good enough for.

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I want to continue here. I'm not asking for Steve or Pic or Rob to comment on every story. It's nice to hear from them but folks like Laurel and Hello are going to look at these strictly from a reader's perspective, and that's what I'm mainly interested in hearing.

That's also why I didn't comment last month and might not this month. We're starting to recognize each other's work, and I think that may give us an unreasonable expectation of what we think someone else should do.

But that's just me. I'm usually wrong.

I really don't know who wrote which story. I could guess but I would probably be wrong.

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I loved the last line of The Little Man and thought it was the most Laymon like of all the stories. There was sex, a lake, gore, perversion, language and lots of humor. My personal favorite.

My second favorite would have to be The Fix. Very cleaver idea with a real Beast House type feel to it. The sexy Laymon humor was there as well as the rumps. Loved it.

Neti Pot. I thought this was a cleaver poke at a certain member of the board but not very Laymon like. The writing was solid and as flash fiction horror I think it worked but it really didn't fit in with this months subject.

The Runt. Liked it quite a bit. Solid writing but I wish it had been longer. I'd love to see this one worked as a longer piece. Definitely had that Laymon feel.

The Blue Ballad of Murder. This one threw me. I was confused and I felt the story bogged down at times. A little more editing may have helped. The story was there somewhere but I think it needed to be cleaned up some. Not my cup of tea.

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The Spartacus War - Barry Strauss
Slow Death - Jim Fielder
The Decline And Fall Of The Roman Empire - Edward Gibbon

Tt. There were two rumps.

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Reading:

The Spartacus War - Barry Strauss
Slow Death - Jim Fielder
The Decline And Fall Of The Roman Empire - Edward Gibbon

Gosh, I missed that last one. I mean I read it, but for some reason it didn't stick out for me. Too engrossed in the story each time I read it I guess. The first one yelled RUMP to me! Ha!

Tt

Huh?

If this is wrong...I don't wanna be right......

Someone, I think during SNL's Weekend Update (Dennis Miller when he was still relevant?), used to say "that's just my opinion, I could be wrong." I was trying to play on that.

You see...that's why I stopped gving my opinion on your statements...I'm always getting them wrong. From now on, when I see something you write that puzzels me, I'm just going to post the first random song lyric that comes to my mind.

Tt

On your first point, I agree. I guess I'm just worried that anyone not writing stories will think this is our little club, and will be leery of posting their thoughts on the stories. It's not that way at all, and I hope everyone on the board feels comfortable giving their opinions whether they submitted a story or not.

As for your second point, I disagree. I think we all do a good enough job keeping our stories fresh that spotting someone's work is not obvious by any means. The only one I think I know this time around is that Horrordude wrote The Neti Pot. The only other option is Tony, and he would've named his wife Uma in the story, not Eva.

Sorry to confuse you, Tt. I guess sometimes I'm a little too old school with my pop culture references.

My story was The Blue Ballad of Murder. And to be honest, it could've been a bit confusing when I look at it now. When I was thinking of writing a Laymon-like story, the same word I kept seeing over and over was, murder. I just wanted it to read like a dark dream fragment. No real deep meaning, other than murder is like a sad ballad that plays on and on.

The excrement part wasn't there to gross anyone out. It was just how I saw it in my mind. I wanted to throw something in that part that would suggest something more perverse and sinister was going on in the room. And for some reason, I've always thought the word excrement just sounds so weird.

The ghost-like tenor sax player got worked in because I was listening to John Coltrane when I was writing this. But other things like the mean woman at the desk, and I think someone asked how could Shaun talk on the phone to her if he was already dead, well, I just wanted that to contribute to the weirdness of the situation he was waking up in.

As far as if we should all keep writing if it's only us responding? I say, why not? If it makes each of us write an extra story each month, then great.

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That was my guess, but only from the comments you made on the story, not on the story itself. Don't ask me to explain, it was just a feeling I got when reading your posts.

Well, since other people are coming forward, I will say that I wrote The Fix.

Hhhmmmm, so we have Thad and Tony left to admit their sins....er, stories.

I'm curious to see who Thad guesses which of us authored those last two stories.

Tt

I'm guessing Tt wrote Swan Song, which leaves me with having written The Stand. Wow, we are two talented SOB's.

The funny thing is I actually went to the first page to see which story was Swan Song and The Stand before I caught the joke.

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Removed.

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